本帖最后由 lihouhang203 于 2011-4-2 19:46 编辑
一个四年级孩子写的小作文。
谢谢支持!有了家长和学生的支持,才能做的更好。
My Mum
My mum has a long, brown hair, big eyes, and she's very tall. She was a beautiful woman.
My mum is forty. But she looks like thirty-five years old. She looks young.
My mum likes coffee. Every night she drank a cup of coffee. It smells very bad.
Mum is talkative. She always talk to other parents. And they always talk very happy.
This is my mum. Is she good?
上边是孩子自己写的,也是第一次写小短文。我没有做任何的改变(包括单词书写)。里面个别时态和用法出错了,但不是大问题。
在原来基础上简单修改一下为:
My mum has long, brown hair, big eyes, and she's very tall. She is a beautiful woman.
My mum is forty. But she looks to be thirty-five years old. She looks young.
My mum likes coffee. Every night she drinks a cup of coffee. It smells very bad.
Mum is talkative. She always talk to other parents. And they always talk very happily.
This is my mum. Is she good? |